Classmate's Critique

I will admit, border security isn’t a topic I usually place special attention to. That being said, the post, Texas $800 Million Border Security Bill Inappropriate on the Texas Politics blog, I found myself nodding and agreeing along to its key points over the subject.

 

Providing Governor Gregg's approval of a $800 million bill from the start I believe was a good choice. Exposing the reader to large sums of capital shows to be effective in catching their attention. Also, adding the spending of useless gunboats by Rick Perry was a good illustration of the states misguided notion over efficient border security. Both details do well in supporting the claim of the piece.

"The problem with the security border is not about money but rather a problem of the security system."

Reviving the old school saying that history repeats itself and that one must learn from previous mistakes, proves to be useful in initiating a reasonable solution to the re-occurring border security problem. Most, if not all readers can easily connect to these notions, it also plays a part in linking  the writers recommendation over what should be done in order to advance the issue. Which is, that if Texas only kept an organized record of all their previous attempts and set up an official overseer over the data to advise on the matter, there would be more success seen and less spending done. 

Moreover, I didn't get the sense of priority I would have expected from such a controversial topic as this one. Choosing to use more precised words such as, "reckless" or "thoughtless" in the title would have fused better, I believe, with the whole post. Also, adding evidence of why the government keep. trying to solve this problem with the same tactics over and over again would have been interesting to know. For example answering questions like, "Who benefits from border construction or the consumption of weaponry? Who's really pulling the strings over the issue?". Another thing that the post would have benefited from is the explanation of why this issue is important to the reader. This could be achieved by including the percentage funding takes away from the states budget which is compensated from civilians. 

Overall the post was well organized, flowy and had a solid composition. There wasn't any confusion over identifying the problem and solution. In saying that, covering the questions I proposed in my fourth paragraph would give the post a stronger foundation to support its claim.